[sha2017-orga] Booklet feedback request, BEFORE wednesday 20:00

[A. Heus]

Hi all,


Booklet looks very nice, back side in mirror image!

>From me also some typo's, still correcting anyway...


Page

4: it's -> its
6: photo's -> photos
8: sigarettes -> cigarettes
8: hesistate -> hesitate
8: posession -> possession
9: buthane -> butane
9: precations: precautions
9: insuffient: insufficient

19: comunication -> communication
20: tthe -> the
22: neighbor -> neighbour
23: sigarettes -> cigarettes


I took the UK English not US English, we are at last in Europe, and the UK
is still in...

Greetings

Anthony





-----Oorspronkelijk bericht-----
Van: Orga [mailto:orga-bounces at lists.sha2017.org] Namens Ultratux techinc
Verzonden: dinsdag 11 juli 2017 14:28
Aan: Elger Jonker; orga at lists.sha2017.org
Onderwerp: Re: [sha2017-orga] Booklet feedback request, BEFORE wednesday
20:00

On 07/11/2017 01:20 PM, Elger Jonker wrote:
> Ohai,
> 
> Below is a link to the booklet.
> 
> As we expect lots of feedback, please share feedback in a brief, bulleted
list with page number per item. That way we can process it sequentially and
be reasonably sure all items have been handled. <blink> Do this before
Wednesday evening 20:00. </blink>
> 



The booklet looks and is fantastic !!


However, that said, I'm pretty darn good at spotting typos et al, so
here is my list of spotted errors/corrections nonetheless: :)



Page 4 paragraph 3: typo

 lot's  -> lots


Page 7 paragraph last: omission

 If someone else is need of ->
 If someone else is in need of


Page 8 paragraph 2: typos

in tact -> intact
sewerage -> sewage


Page 8 paragraph Waste: typos

Pretty sure that "then" has to be "than"... but ask a native speaker if
still in doubt.

sigarettes -> cigarettes


Page 8, paragraph Photos/video: typos

hesistate -> hesitate
persons -> person's


page 9, paragraph Fire: typo

buthane -> butane


page 9, paragraph Villages: typo

precations -> precautions


page 10, paragraph 2 & 4: possible typo

I think it is telephone network, not telephony network.


page 11, 1st paragraph: typo

it's -> its


page 11, paragraph 8: wrongness

"a an (educational)" ? the 'a' is likely unwanted.


page 13 (Map): typo

Babage -> Babbage


page 20, 1st paragraph: typo

tthe -> the


page 20, 2nd paragraph: wrongness

"we have a offer a safe haven"
  probably needs to become
"we have to offer a safe haven"
 or perhaps rather
"we have a safe haven to offer"



page 22, "when leaving camp" paragraph: typo

sigarettes -> cigarettes


page 22, last  paragraph: awkward wording

"telling this in the Angel system" is not wrong per se, but maybe
"remarking this in the Angel system" or "putting a note in the Angel
system" is phrased better...



cheers
Maarten

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